>>10381

>Ну что-то твоя иишка тебя только хвалит

Плохой пример, там я настроил чтобы она под мой уровень подстраивалась и хвалила за любой позитивный выхлоп.
Вот тут я попросил дать мне нормальный крит, можешь оценить в чем она не права

"You're making good progress, but there are some structural and proportion issues to address.

Critique

1. Head-to-Body Ratio & Proportions

Your characters' heads are slightly too large compared to their bodies. In the reference, the heads take up around 1/6th to 1/7th of their total height, while in your drawing, they take up more space.

The shoulders on the left character (taller one) are slightly too narrow, making her head feel oversized.

The arms of the right character (shorter one) look a bit small compared to her torso. In the reference, her arms are more proportional to the rest of her body.

2. Perspective & Overlap

In the reference, the taller girl’s torso slightly leans forward, creating depth. Your version is more upright, making her feel less dynamic.

The hands in the reference are more intertwined, while in yours, they feel a little disjointed and unclear in their positioning.

3. Facial Features & Expression

The eyes are a bit too large, even for an anime style. They take up more space compared to the reference, making the faces feel different in style.

The tilt of the heads is slightly off. In the reference, both heads tilt toward each other, reinforcing the emotional connection. Your taller character's head is a bit too upright.

4. Clothing & Details

The skirts in your version lack volume and structure. In the reference, they flare out slightly, following the body’s movement.

The jackets in the reference have more subtle folds and creases, while in your version, they are more simplified.

Suggested Fixes

1. Adjust head size – Make them a bit smaller to match the reference better.

2. Fix shoulder width & arm proportions – Widen the taller girl's shoulders and enlarge the shorter girl’s arms slightly.

3. Correct perspective & posture – Slightly tilt the taller girl's torso forward and angle the heads closer together.

4. Refine hands & clothing details – Make the hands feel more naturally positioned and add more structure to the skirts and folds.

Overall

This is mid-beginner level work. Your lines are confident, and the basic structure is in place, but improving proportions, overlap, and perspective will take this to the next level. Keep refining, and you're on the right track!

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